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		<title>Show and Tell</title>
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		<pubDate>Tue, 16 Jun 2009 17:52:36 +0000</pubDate>
		<dc:creator>Trina</dc:creator>
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		<description><![CDATA[Talks about the need to show versus tell in our books and to let go of words or expressions that are overused. [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Okay, so <a href="http://www.katrinaspencer.com/blog/index.php/2009/06/15/sigh/" target="_blank">yesterday I blogged</a> about my overuse of the word sigh.  I was worried that I if I didn&#8217;t say my character sighed, then my readers wouldn&#8217;t understand how irritated she was.  But if I kept my character sighing every five minutes, then I would be cheating my readers.</p>
<p>For instance, when I wanted to try a new hair product on a client, I could give them a list of ingredients and tell them how great the product would be for their hair.  &#8220;Try this smoothing serum.  It has silicone in it, which will make your hair cuticles lay flat and prevent frizzing.&#8221; Boring right? </p>
<p>But if I put a few drops of serum in their hair and let them <em>feel</em> the difference it made&#8211;more shine, less frizz, noticeable softness&#8211;they were sold.  They would buy the product because they could <em>see</em> how it worked. </p>
<p>Writing is the same thing.  We need to show our readers what we&#8217;re talking about so they feel it.  If we can&#8217;t grab their emotions, then we&#8217;re not doing our job as writers.  They won&#8217;t connect with the characters and eventually they will do what every writer fears&#8211;they will put our book down.</p>
<p>So here&#8217;s what I did to show that my character was irritated.  I used her body language to show that she was upset.  I would have her drum her nails on a table, or scratch her head.  Sometimes I would use italics to put emphasis on certain words.  Instead of, &#8220;I said I would take you to the store.&#8221; I changed it to, &#8220;I<em> said</em> I would take you to the store.&#8221;  Little things like that made a big difference in my manuscript and I could stop using the word sigh as a crutch.  Don&#8217;t get me wrong, I still use it&#8211;but only as a last resort.  Do you have any words or expressions that you wear out in your writing?</p>
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